#fridayfictioneers – September 6, 2024
The old tavern didn’t look like much. It was a popular gathering place for music and meeting people back in 1986.
The young man, barely of age, stumbled in the door. He was blind with despair.
He spotted a girl dancing alone on the dance floor. He watched her as he drank a beer. This place and that girl made him feel less lonely.
He joined her on the dance floor.
He whispered, “Take me home tonight. I don’t want to let you go until we see the light.”
She just smiled.
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*Based on the song, “Take Me Home Tonight,” by Eddie Money, 1986.
The Write Scribe 
I think he’s looking for a tad more than a smile. But it’s a start.
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As I thought about him, I felt his desperation. Thanks, Sandra!
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And then another story began!
Hope there was light!
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How true! Another story does begin. Thanks!
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There are several types of smiles, hopefully this was the kind he yearned for!
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Her smile may indicate that she’s no dummy. I hope so, anyway. He sounds like a lot to take on!
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I’ve heard of worse pickup lines (and that’s a great song, with Ronnie Spector making her comeback with it.) Enjoyable story, R.M.
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What a beautiful little story. I can see this going further into a full novel. Great writing!
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Let’s hope they sre both just what the other needed. Cute story, i love ‘blind with despair’
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I like to thin k she has a kind heart and won’t lead him astray…
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I think she should smile and walk away. He sounds a bit much. Lovely writing.
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Thank you so much, Brenda!
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A smile could mean the night could go either way. Does he take home the girl?
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You’re right, of course. Does he take home the girl? I may continue the story – and then you’ll know! Thanks!
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I will look forward to that.
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Oo, that ending. What is she thinking? You show us the troubled young man, but the girl is very enigmatic. I like how you left us wondering here.
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Thanks so much, Margaret!
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as I was reading I was thinking it reminds of a song… and then got to the line “Take me home tonight…,” that’s it! Nicely done
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Oh, that ending! I have so many questions, especially about what kind of girl he has met.
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